I think you have potential. But I'll just say, other hentai is the worst reference you could use if you want to develop your anatomy.

Absolutely gorgeous animation. And really good pacing. Only thing I'll say is that I couldn't read the title font for the life of me so anyone who tries to read it will likely not remember it. Also One thing about the writing is that the girl was wondering what was going on but then acts like shes experienced and that was a confusing aspect to follow. But still a high score for the animation and character design I loved it :)

This was a fun watch :) Only thing I'll say is to work on your anatomy, a couple of instances I was taken aback from too short or too long arms

I was about to suggest maybe adding some lines that portrays excitement and screaming but, yeah you need a better microphone or at least a pop filter for the time being to capture the true range of your voice. Other than that, 3 stars because I know for sure you'll do better in the future.

I actually love this, its definitely nothing I've ever seen before.